Friday, October 16, 2009

Vote on a Query

Okay, here are two different starts to my query. Let me know which you like best, or if I can improve on either.

Seventeen-year-old Samantha Sanders has vivid nightmares—which take her inside the mind of a killer, as she dreams of murders that actually happen…while they’re happening. She discovers a connection between her dreams and an ancient line of Cherokee Protectors, who fight Flesh Eaters—monsters that look like us, but come straight from the depths of legend.

Sam finds herself, not only attracted to another Protector, local hottie, Sheriff’s Deputy Andrew Clearwater, but also to one of the monsters. And this man-monster has the power to control her dreams and influence her feelings.

Second one:

Driven into a lust for blood and for the monster hunting innocent people in her dreams, seventeen-year-old Samantha Sanders discovers her nightmares are more than mere imagination. The monsters are real. And one is stalking her every move. When she learns she belongs to an ancient line of Cherokee Protectors who fight the monsters from legend, her fears spike. That is until one of the Protectors takes an interest in her and teaches her how to defend herself and others. In the process, her heart is left unguarded and she falls into the pitfalls of young love.

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